润色邮件： Dear officer, I have checked the status and is shows that "condition fulfilled", but I did not find where can I download the document. Thus, my request is to get a copy of the final transcript that my undergraduate school directly sent to CUHK in May. My question is whether I can get it so that I don't need to order another transcript again from the University of Toronto, thereby removing the cost.

润色后的邮件

Dear Officer,

I have reviewed the status, which indicates "condition fulfilled." However, I am unable to locate the download option for the document. I kindly request assistance in obtaining a copy of the final transcript that my undergraduate institution sent to CUHK in May. My aim is to avoid the need to order another transcript from the University of Toronto, thus eliminating the associated costs.

解释

邮件的润色主要关注了以下几个方面：

1. 礼貌和正式性：使用了"Dear Officer"作为开头，保持了正式和礼貌的语气。
2. 清晰性：将"I have checked the status and is shows that"修改为"I have reviewed the status, which indicates"，使句子更加清晰和流畅。
3. 具体性：明确指出了需要的文档是"a copy of the final transcript"，并且指出了发送的时间和接收机构。
4. 目的性：在最后一段中明确了请求的目的，即避免重复订购成绩单以节省成本。

通过这些修改，邮件变得更加专业和易于理解，同时保持了请求的礼貌和明确性。1